am writing you in response to a letter that I received from your bank yesterday
. As I understand , it stated there that there was a $35 that was charged on my
account after completing a wire transfer. I would like to express my
dissatisfaction about this as I am not aware of such transaction and paying a
certain amount for a service that I did not even made makes me more worried.
has been almost a week now that I have not accessed my account. Also, it is
very unlikely for me to execute a wire transfer as I have not did it before.
You can probably request to retrieve the details of my transaction history and
I am confident that you will not find any money transfer that has been executed
since the first day I opened up my savings account with your bank. Moreover,
all of my bill payments and money transactions are set up in a way that it will
be automatically be deducted from my savings fund at the end of the month .
would like to point out that this kind of banking system failure can create
unpleasant business relationship between us and even to your numerous clients.
I suggest that you start your own internal investigation to address this system
failure and immediately implement a corrective action.
soon as you find out where is the disconnect , I demand a full proof that this
will not happen again. Please immediately pull back the $30 charges you imposed
to my account as well.
You were able to express
your complaint regarding the erroneous bank transaction. You were able to
express what action you want from the bank. Tone is generally polite except for
the word “demand”.
Good topic specific
vocabulary was used: unpleasant business relationship, money transactions,
banking system failure.
COHERENCE AND COHESION
Good linking words were
used: moreover, also. Paragraphs are generally clear, logical and organized.
GRAMMATICAL RANGE AND
No grammar errors noted.
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