The following IELTS essay was written by Adham. He argues
against the negative effects of IT.
In the last 20 years
there have been significant developments in the field of information technology
(IT), for example the World Wide Web and communication by email. However, these
developments in IT are likely to have more negative effects than positive in
To what extent do you
agree with this view?
A prominent advancement has been observed in domain of
information technology (IT), like web network and emailing service, in last 2
decades. There exists both positive and negative outcomes of this change, but I
do not believe that, in the long run, the negative side going to outweight the
As far as the disadvantages of IT are concerned, it imposes
huge impact on the mentality of young generation. Firstly, the students are
getting more and more reliable on internet for their home work which is
suppressing their mental growth. For example, the assignments given at school
are done by the students by searching on google or wikipedia as a mass
compendium of information is available to them. Furthermore, pornography on
websites are available to underage children because they can easily claim to be
an adult on the internet.
However I believe IT has provided us much more benefits that
will also be of service to mankind in future. Thanks to this development, the
people around the world can keep updated by what is happening anywhere. From
any research finding to fashion activities, all are instantly available on the
internet. Moreover, e-mailing and voice communication has provided easiness in
global business communication which would take much more time through post
Like this era, I think the negative effect of IT could never
out run the positives. While, on the other hand, it could possible that with
further advancement of this technology we could get our hands on the negatives.
You were able to give your reasons why you disagree that
there are more negative effects than positive effects. However, avoid having
multiple main points in one paragraph.
Good technology vocabulary: e-mailing, voice communication, web
network, mass compendium.
Good transition words were used: firstly, for example,
however, on the other hand. However, improve organization by using the
Body Paragraph 1 – Disagree 1
Body Paragraph 2 – Disagree 2
Body Paragraph 3 –Agree 1
GRAMMATICAL RANGE AND
There are some grammar errors:
-in domain of information technology
-in last 2 decades
-imposes huge impact
-of young generation
-negative side going
-it could possible
-pornograph on websites are available
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