The following IELTS writing essay was written by
Ziauhl and she writes about expensive weddings.
Nowadays, people are spending increasingly large
amounts of money on their marriage parties. Many people feel large and
expensive weddings cause problems for the bride and groom. Do you
agree? Use personal examples in your response.
In today’s world, many couples often aspire to
throw lavish wedding parties to celebrate with their friends and families.However, often these parties put a
strain on newly married couple. It is possible to say that huge spending on the
marriage celebrations can cause difficulties for brides and grooms. This will
be proven by looking at how excessive wedding ceremonies affect the newlyweds
financially and cause the entire gathering to be somewhat unrealistic in
Firstly, many people often create problems for
themselves when they spend excessive amounts of money on their matrimonial
ceremonies. An instance illustrating this in action is that some friends of
mine in Norway borrowed huge amount of money to pay for an expensive marriage,
which was held in 1996. Following their matrimonial ceremonies, they have to
pay every penny of their earning to their debt continuously for two years. This
money could better be used for building a better life for them. Thus, it is
understandable that problems can arise for those who spend huge amount of money
on their weddings.
In addition to this, huge and expensive wedding can
cause the occasion to be somewhat unnatural.
For example, I once attended a very large wedding
in India.Perhaps, it was a most
beautiful and expensive matrimonial ceremony, I have ever seen. The guests list
was so large, that is why I could not give my wishes to newly married
couple.These newlyweds later on
regret for not being able to see guests. Thus, it is clear from this example
that large weddings can cause problems for both husbands and wives.
In conclusion, it has been proven that expensive
weddings can cause difficulties for newly married individuals.Thus, it is predicted that people will
take into account the advantages and drawbacks of spending extreme amounton their marriage celebrations.
were able to give the effects of expensive weddings to couples and you cited
personal examples to prove your point. However, your wordcount is 304. Reduce
to 250-265 words to save time.
have a good range of vocabulary: put a strain, matrimonial, lavish.
transition words: in conclusion, in addition to this, for example. Structure
needs improvement. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. Follow five-paragraph
Paragraph 1 – Agree
Paragraph 2 – Agree
Paragraph 3 – Disagree
RANGE AND ACCURACY
Grammar errors are minor and do not affect
comprehension: my wishes to newly married couple.
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