You were able to give reasons why the building is important. You provided solutions to avert the pulling down of Town Hall. However, your wordcount is 211. Reduce to 150-165 words to minimize errors.
Vocabulary is varied but some words are inappropriate: junta, diverse, architect. Avoid wordiness and use more straightforward language : in local governing body's decision making ability.
COHERENCE AND COHESION
Paragraphs are clear, logical and to the point. There are a number of transition words used: moreover, for example, further to add.
GRAMMATICAL RANGE AND ACCURACY
There are minor grammar errors but they don't impede in comprehension: a great faith.
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